Version 6! More commentary coming soon.
I don't know if starting with a poem's the best way to go. I've seen it done well, sooo... I dunno. At least it's not prologue about the beginning of the universe or something.
Huh. Should've done more research on hospital rooms. And perspective. And Maria isn't crying, that's a freaking waterfall pouring from a line that is her lower eyelid.
This is a reference to the painting Mary Magdalen with the Smoking Flame by Georges de la Tour. Copying old masters' paintings is a good way to learn art, and figured doubling them as chapter covers was a good idea. It also made for a nice gimmick.
Yup, here we go. Bad perspective on the house, bad anatomy on the people. *sigh*
I have no sense of location. They're on the porch of the building. Can you tell?
These pages are painful! The drawings look flat, and their eyes are just weird looking! I was deviating away from manga style to more realisticand they ended up with these weird, in between looking eyes.
The sidewalk is going straight up. And the other sidewalk in the back is so lazily drawn it looks like an earthworm. There's those freaky deeky frog faces again.
A bit better. Experimenting with the thickness of pens really helped. I think the pacing could use some work though.
A little better yet, though that perspective is still weird. Their bodies are all too short here.
Though not without its flaws, I still kind of like this page.It skims over some past relationships and I'm starting to get ahold of how facial expressions work.
It worked better in my head. Always wanted to re-do this page, but was sick of looking back all the time.
Eh. It's always fun to look at lazy backgrounds then shake my head in disappointment at my past self.
These pages are actually older than the ones above. I had re-written the beginning but still kept these pages from the previous version. I still like them.
SKFF! Isn't drawing hands fun?
What she's holding is a motorcycle key ring with an LED that she uses like a flashlight. The three frames on the middle right don't work at all. It feels like the dialogue should be broken up, yet it isn't. I like the bottom middle frame, even if she does have six fingers on her hand.
Me struggling with texture on a wall. This page is kind of blurry. Probably a poor scan job.
Yup, nails in his eyes. Maria's arms in the bottom right frame are too thin and too flat. There's no hint of a wrist, knuckles, or where the elbows should righfully be.
First bubble top should have been broken up. I could've easily made the words smaller, too. I like the bottom left frame. Few complaints with it.
Not too bad. Maria's face can look a bit off, but it could be worse.
I like his feet.
The top six frames are a bit confusing, but it's not like you couldn't tell what was going on. A cute page.
Another page that doesn't make me want to pound my head against the desk.
Maria, top left, worked. Tao, bottom right, did not. End of story.